i think this is nice. but you could have put the text in sections so then it is easier to read.
Hi, I see you've used the team house style - good, but what is there in the poster that tells us that this is about a Zoo?Is it a poster? An advert? How about some text that tells us this in your post?Next thing, try reading out loud your text - then think about where you might put some punctuation in to make it clearer.
I think this is really good but you could add some commas because its quite hard to read, the sentences are really long.
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i think this is nice. but you could have put the text in sections so then it is easier to read.
ReplyDeleteHi, I see you've used the team house style - good, but what is there in the poster that tells us that this is about a Zoo?
ReplyDeleteIs it a poster? An advert? How about some text that tells us this in your post?
Next thing, try reading out loud your text - then think about where you might put some punctuation in to make it clearer.
I think this is really good but you could add some commas because its quite hard to read, the sentences are really long.
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